Interesting form, the last two lines fit perfectly.

It is a great form it's quite complicated. I was going to put it in the description but i'll just do it here. Apparently it can be written in any meter as long as it stays the same, this is the rhyming structure:
a/x/b/c
x/a/x/c
a/x/a/b
a/b

x is a word that doesn't rhyme with any other.

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llizArd

Cool, that does sound complicated. Might give that a go some day.

It makes for a subtle rhyme though it's fun. I hope you'll note me if you do

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llizArd

i liek this, its an interesting rhyme scheme and i like the end it finishes it perfectly

Thats cool, but dont you want to deeply analyse it? You do dont you, you know you do

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llizArd

The sun beats down upon the wasteland,
A heat haze (1) obscures the horizon,
This dusty road is unforgiving,
My naked feet begin to blister. (2)

No well, so deep as to quench my thirst,
No water blesses an outstretched hand, (3)
My feet bleed on a small round pebble,
She's ashamed to be my blood sister. (4)

Who knew that the sky could be so bland?
Not a single cloud decoration. (5)
If I had lived the life I'd planned,
There'd be people behind me grieving. (6)

The road I walked sinks into the sand,
Thank the Lord I'm no longer living.

(1)-try hazy heat

(2)-try The dusty road, unforgiving.
Naked feet, blistering.
although that completely ruins the rhyme scheme but do u see what i mean?

(3)i dont like it, the no well bit makes it seem...odd, in a non good way try somethign different, change the sentence structure around or something or try more dramatic language
No water to ease this burning thirst,
No water blesses this cracking hand. somethig liek that, thats crap but ya know! lol, and end it with a full stop

(4) change round pebble to sharp pebble adn end it with a full stop again for dramatisation

(5) add for in there

(6) skip the full stop, make it faster in pace

there ya go happy now

Truly another work of art, Poet!

EnduringDreamer

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